Below, you'll see any text that was highlighted with comments from the reviewer.
i was moved by how you portrayed the characterization and how the mother's addiction has affected her kids. especially how you described jamie; it was heart-wrenching the way she didn't understand what was happening and wanted to stay, and how kara had to take charge. i love how you use body language to portray this and draw out a sympathetic reaction from the reader.
i believe most of the things that i thought should be added, i said in the highlights. mostly, i would like to see more description, body language, and detail, as i believe it would help to fully flesh out the piece and add to the emotional depth.
excellent work! this piece really is well-written and meaningful, and i hope it didn't seem like i was being too harsh with this review. i adored how you created and characterized our protagonists, and how you fleshed out a full story with such a fairly short piece. i also enjoy how you leave the ending fairly open, so the reader is left to imagine what becomes of our protagonist after you finish the piece. again, fantastic work, and keep writing!