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I don't really know what the song is about, it seems to be written like a fantasy story but, I don't know what any of the metaphors mean if they even mean anything at all.
"A broken harp still tries to play," I think it just sounds very good and emotional, a lot of lines in the song are like that.
They could have done an intro, verse 1,2,3 and a chorus Instead of a few lines or verses but, I like how the song flows.
Try to shape it into different verses, add a catchy chorus and keep the poetic flow of the song, it is really good!
At first, I didn't really get the song but, now that I've read over it a few times I think I'm starting to understand it better, well done and keep on writing!