Peer Review by Charlotte Collins (United States)

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Dreamcatcher

By: CrowSF


Verse 1
I don’t know if my dreamcatcher’s broken
but lately these nightmares have been more spoken
I’m not one to be superstitious
but a broken dream catcher is suspicious

Pre Chorus
Peaceful rest I want
freezing sweat I get
My mind has its traps
each night they are set

Chorus
The feathers and string won’t do anything
The demons still whisper, I will still sing
Feathers and string (broken)
Demons and I (spoken)
 
Verse 2
I now know that my dreamcatcher’s broken
That’s why these nightmares have been more spoken
I’m not sure if I’m superstitious
But a broken dream catcher has me suspicious 

Pre Chorus
Peaceful rest I want
freezing sweat I get
My mind has its traps
each night they are set

Chorus
The feathers and string won’t do anything
The demons still whisper, I will still sing
Feathers and string (broken)
Demons and I (spoken)

Bridge
There are no atheists in bed frames
Where is the end to this mind game? 
I remember the dreams
I can still hear the screams
x2, repetition screamed 

Chorus
The feathers and string won’t do anything
The demons still whisper, I will still sing
Feathers and string (broken)
Demons and I (spoken)
x2

Coda (whispered)
Feathers and string, broken, broken
Demons and I, spoken, spoken...

 


Peer Review

I feel like I can relate to it. I love how the lyrics speak to people who don't really believe that dream catchers really work, but still have them just in case. I feel like it was written to those of us that need to be related to and need to know that their fears are valid. That they are valid. It's slightly creepy, but not overpowering and somehow gentle. I believe that, depending on how it is sung, it can leave you stunned or feeling caressed by the words.


All of the coda, because I feel like its more penetrating, especially since you specified that it is whispered. It kind of gives you the chills singing it out loud.


I think it is really good, and I know it might be on purpose, but in case it isn't, I would suggest making sure you are okay with Verse 1 and Verse 2 being so similar.


I really like it. I tend to be drawn towards songs that I can relate to and that speak to me and I really believe that this is one of them. You have tremendous talent to have been able to think of such a song and you should be really proud of it. If you choose to change/edit anything, I believe you can only make it better.


Reviewer Comments

I love the pacing and the repetition of it, kind of like a chant you'd say to yourself to keep from getting too scared. To say the least, I think it is really good and I hope to hear it on the radio one day.