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Message to Readers
I'm gonna be honest. This turned out A LOT longer than I wanted it too. Anyway, enjoy! Any feedback is appreciated!
First off, THIS WAS SO GOOD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! okay, now that I have taken several deep breathes, I am in love with this world. It's so simple yet so so intricate. Something that moved me was the way that although the main character has seemed to accept her life, it isn't happy go lucky but very much so the realistic feelings she goes through in her adventures with Ann that make her relatable to the reader in a way not all characters are. Two sections that struck me in particular were "Maybe I didn't want to remember. Maybe I was scared. Scared that if I went back, the place wouldn't seem as magical as it was before." for it's realness to wanting something so bad you almost don't want it because you want to believe it was real but you're almost unsure and "I didn't often look at myself. And, somehow, I pictured myself as a different person than what my reflection showed. It gave me this uneasy feeling." because as I mentioned in the highlighted note, it evokes the fact that you an feel uncertain of yourself in so many ways and while I certainly don't love feeling uncertain about myself, it gives the character a very relatable feeling and not very larger than life which i think happens far to often without that intention in literature these days. You have a very good understanding of your characters which is really awesome.
I made a note for the sentence "I stay in a closed space, which is marked by multiple exotic and easy to remember objects that I formed a large circle with." which is an area I think you could deepen a little.
I can't wait for Part 4. Also, the sentences about Ann have got me wondering about the main characters name and whether or not she'll find it in the cave or something. This is me just thinking aloud as well so you don't have to answer (I don't want spoilers) but I also wonder if Ann is ever going to find her way back home and what the main character would do... I have so many questions that I can't wait to get answered!!!!!
You are a brilliant writer by the way. I'm glad I've gotten to follow this story and am excited to continue following it!