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I'm gonna be honest. This turned out A LOT longer than I wanted it too. Anyway, enjoy! Any feedback is appreciated!
The plot inside! Even in is the third installment of this novel, I am still interested and engrossed in every word. Although I gave a few, somewhat harsh critiques on my last peer review for the book, I am glad I read this part since it is fantastic! You seem to just grow better and better as a writer.
The only thing I would recommend to add more details. Explaining specific aspects of writing (while "showing, not telling") spices up the text and makes the readers more interested. So merely, just elaborate.
I cannot wait for Part 4. Great job!