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Your style is unlike any I've ever seen before. It's unique in the best way possible. I love the word choices you make and the gorgeously vivid imagery you use throughout the piece. A lot of it is also incredibly creative and I can tell that you probably make an effort to avoid cliches.
While I think the piece is outstanding, there are parts where I can't discern why certain techniques are used (though this may just be me missing it). I think I've highlighted one instance of it somewhere. In essence, I'd say that in the future, you could probably be a little more decisive with your choices in techniques. Once again, however, I might just be missing some things. Perhaps where I don't see the significance of something, someone else might understand it perfectly.
I can't believe I've only seen your work now on. Your writing is beautiful and the quality of this work is amazing. Hopefully I get to see more of you on the future. Also, sorry for the lateness of this review. You asked for one a while ago on a review bomb, but I've only gotten to it now. Hopefully it's still helpful.