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I really liked reading this piece, at first I was unsure what it was about but, then I pieced it together, (At least I think I did)
There isn't much to change about this piece, it has a poetic feel to it as well. Maybe adding more of a story to show the true meaning of all the lines.
I enjoyed reading this piece, I like the choice of writing and adjectives you used. Try to add more of a storyline or more information on what the meaning is. Well done, it's very good!