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I invite all your questions and criticism! To answer your first one, no, I don't know what the girl is dying of either. Something occurring in acute spells, obviously with wide enough intervals in between for the girl to hold intelligible conversations with her friend . . .
One is sick and the other is trying to help.
Sad and Happy at the same time.
This is FANTASTIC! You're a great writer!