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By: AJ - Izzy
Message to Readers
"That it will never come again is what makes life so sweet."
- Emily Dickinson
The persistance of the prince despite his failure. It was so tragic! Well done.
I would like to know more about the importance of the dead being able to see what the living could not. I want to know exactly how that ties into the story.
I know I said this before, but this story was beautifully tragic! I approve of your sad ending. (Yikes, that sounds bad...) The only thing I would change is getting rid of the spaces between paragaraphs since those aren't usually there in other stories. Other than that, excellent story!