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I need feedback!!! Quite desperately!! On anything really but very much about pacing and smooth continuity. Also, anyone got any tips on fitting everything I need into 1000 words?
I loved the imagery surrounding the dying dragon. The comparisons in their blood is captivating.
Adoni seemed to have a strong connection with the dragon. It would be great to hear their motivations as to why.
The fact of people vanishing isn't explained in a way that makes sense. I get that it is meant to be a mystery, but characters we barely meet begin talking about it, making the scenes with it less impactful.
Your imagery is excellent! It is captivating and absolutely wonderful to read.
For getting under 1000 words, my only recommendation is cutting down on unnecessary sentences. If it doesn't contribute to the story, it shouldn't exist. That's my two cents anyways. It can be hard to determine where those sentences might be, and maybe you don't even have them.