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The supposed magiies
Yes, so it off with you finding your a magi? How did you find out you could use magic? That you were a magi?
Yes a lot of places in this story like when she got kidnapped by the dark lord,when she was trapped and couldn't get out,when she was running from the dark magiies and she woke up and what was all the dream but she still use magic.
Please make sure our sentences make sense. Check your grammer as well. Also I got lost in the story it like there were so many pieces missing.
Instead telling us(the reader) that your characters are doing something could describe it?