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This is the prologue in the series I'm working on, if your interested in more, check out War Over Cairaduen, Orins Journy, Chapter 1, Pursued.
The fact that its filled with such mystery.
I'd love to know more about Muriadil and why she wanted so desperatly to rule the world, but I'm sure you'll get to that.
You are doing a really wonderful job! This story is great so far and the Anglo-Saxon vibe is super cool to see, you typically don't see this in such young writers, but its great!
This is great, its compelling, its everything a great epic should be. Keep up the hard work!