nezi_nes

Hong Kong

~on an indeterminate hiatus~

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Idk but I feel there's something missing from this piece. Leaves me this weird taste in my mouth. It might be just me though, please tell me what you think.

nostalgia #escapril

June 4, 2019

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too rosy to believe
too tempting not to

steadily 
compressing into your chest
until a tear appears

it infiltrates your lungs
inundating you with swirls
of memory 

a sharp breath
shakes your eyes into focus

and all you are left with is
estrangement

heart
in limbo
Day 6. Prompt: "nostalgia".

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4 Comments
  • nezi_nes

    Thanks, that's true now that you say it..hm yeah I'll leave it like this then.


    8 months ago
  • omicron7889

    Something missing? Hmm I get what you mean but at the same time the weird taste in your mouth might be just what you want for a piece about nostalgia. I like it though :)


    8 months ago
  • nezi_nes

    Thanks Aarushi! Good to know your input on this piece.


    10 months ago
  • Aarushikrishnan

    Your writing is so clean and neatly done, great job!


    10 months ago