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Message to Readers
Okay, I want to make it perfectly clear that I have never been in a school shooting or apart of one but I feel awful for everyone that has been. This story was based purely off of a true story I read off of the school shooting I read about Parkland and online stories. I understand that this is a difficult topic and in no way, shape or form am I trying to make it less than what it is.
(I didn't read your message to readers until after I read the piece.) I love the sense of mystery that this piece has. It makes it very intriguing. The topic that this piece covers is extremely serious, you covered it well. I feel like you really took the reader into your piece. I am blessed to have never been part of a school shooting, but your piece made it real for me.
Try to find places you could be more specific and add more details about the situation. I understand that some things are better left unsaid, but I feel like some places are a bit too vague. I'll let you be the judge of where you think you should add details.
Despite the seriousness of the topic, you are able to keep it serious while also making it an interesting and intriguing story. This piece was deep and meaningful. Great job, and keep writing!