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The geography of it really amazed me. The thought that every lost item, arrives at this unknown location. I never honestly thought of actual humans would reside here. But orphanages do contain children who don't have any parents or are lost, so it makes sense with your eloquent writing that a human can dwell on the Land of Lost Things.
I would love to know more about both characters. I know this is only one installment of the rest of the story, but considering it as the one and only piece (with no continuation, since it is for a writing competition), it was just too much of a cliffhanger for both characters (more of a cliffhanger for the speaker than Ann, which is weird since she is more present in the text and she still had a minimal amount revealed about her). Anyway, for Ann, she just appears, believes that the speaker was her sister and that was all talked about her in the text. I was just waiting for at least ONE characteristic/character trait for her and for the narrator, she seems like a key and intriguing person, she is the main focus of the chapter,and yet she is with no attention grabbing details. She has just too much historical context (with much of it just speculative), not focusing on the present, with historical context is helpful but, honestly, I just wanted more. I mean, setting and characters are TRULY induced in this piece, but think about other elements that make up a story.
There were no rules mentioned or seemed-to-be established in the text. It seemed like it was mostly about the speaker and Ann, with a bit of wishy-washy transitions. Rules define a state, country, let alone a whole world! Without them, they would be total anarchy (It IS the Land for Lost Things). This fantastic idea you have spun up just need some boundaries.
I would just personally analyze your text with brutal honesty. That is what great authors do.
Your writing is INCREDIBLE! I think that you truly have a gift, but I am honestly just explaining some flaws in this piece. I hope you don't hate me!