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At first I thought this piece was just about someone's love of water, but as I read, I realized it wasn't just about the water itself, but rather, what was in the water. The talk of merfolk and water creatures surprised me, but also made the piece more fun, playful, and creative.
You mostly focus on the narrator's desire to go to the water. Maybe you could add more detail about the water itself. What else makes the narrator called to the water besides the merfolk, and how can you incorporate that in this piece? You could also give more description about the merfolk, maybe even incorporate some backstory about them, such as how the narrator came to be acquainted to them or believe in them. That will help you create more imagery and really bring the reader there, experiencing the piece for themselves.
Great piece, and amazing word choice! Keep writing!