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The way you move through this piece is clever, and your storytelling is amazing. When the EpiPen was introduced, I was instantly curious as to what the story entailed for it. I was delighted by the humor and magic you add into this piece while detailing an event that was probably scary at the time. Also, showing Alice as she is 16 after two years of having the EpiPen realizing how important it is really is a good way to close the piece.
You include lots of detail about Disney, which I appreciated, as well about the EpiPen. You could deepen the part of the story when Alice becomes "woozy" and faints. I feel like that is such a central part of this piece that you could include more details about it, really making the reader feel that experience.
One heck of a piece!!