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The greatest strength of your piece is the emphasis on the magical aspects of this place.
Your piece has a very light, relaxed tone that creates such a mood.
"soaring over the waves" adds realism to the peace, while still adding magic. Picturing the waves is an element of realism but "soaring" adds the idea of flight, therefore magic.
First, let me say I loved your piece. However, I am unsure where this place is, and your piece lacks the everyday aspect. While the mystery adds more to the magical sense. it does little to help the everyday sense. Maybe expand with more description to allude to where this place is, and describing is something you seem to be very excellent at. You use strong verbs, and even with so few, you still create a great picture! Excellent work! Keep writing!