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Message to Readers
Any form a feed back is greatly appreciated. The only way to improve is from careful constructive criticism.
This was so sad! But also really powerful...it reminded me a lot of a great feel-good movie with a beautiful piano (of course!) soundtrack.
You spend a lot of time reporting what happened after Grace's death. I know that it's a lot happening over a long period of time, but try to delve into specific moments and give us a feel for what happened, rather than skimming over it all.
A few notes....Work on the mechanics of dialogue. It takes a while to get the hang of, but your writing will improve immensely once you figure it out.
Also, try to show, not tell. Don't tell us the character's feelings, show us actions that display them.
Thirdly-to keep from having run-on sentences....try to start a new sentence whenever the subject changes. Same goes for paragraphs.
To make your writing easier to read, you should also alternate the length of your sentences. It will flow so much better when you can do this.
Good job! With some revision you'll have people reaching for their Kleenex to sob their hearts out.