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incorporate music #escapril

By: nezi_nes


FREE WRITING

worship music carries a certain stigma
cheesy, seemingly sloppy lyrics in adoration
of what some might call an imaginary entity

i for one, used to detest the monotony and predictability
of its “simple” love songs
made only by deluded fabricators

but when i listen
i hear
i feel
i remember
my life
and his grace

long silent struggles
grapples and tugs this way that way
is this real how can it be
challenge after challenge i am relentless
many
tears
and breathless prayers

times where i say this is it there cannot not be a god
times where i bite back this does not make sense at all

yet i come back to the worship incorporate
surrender all
through songs he speaks
i want to dance
and move 
and cry
in adoration of not just my saviour
but the god that loves all 
and no exceptions

the battle is far from over
but the spirit in me does not give up
and neither does he

Day 3.

Message to Readers

This is one of my more personal pieces. If anyone else is going through struggles in faith, I feel you. Also welcome to chat even if you don't struggle or associate with Christianity/faith :)


Peer Review

This is such a beautiful way of talking about God’s love. I was very moved by how personal this piece was, and how descriptive your language is!


I imagine this is very much something you write for yourself, so I don’t really have any suggestions! I would love to hear your story of how you came to believe in God, though. Maybe we could talk! :)


Reviewer Comments

As a Christian, I really loved this piece for its personal significance to me and Christians everywhere. As a writer, I really appreciated it for its eloquence and personality. Good job!