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"The sky was painted in the mixture of coquelicot and pale lilac as the blase sun sank behind the city". The amount of detail that you put into this sentence is breathtaking. The description of the sky is as vivid as it gets.
Longing and contentment at the same time.
Is this scene based off of a landscape that you've seen in your own life?
You truly have a gift for descriptive writing. Your opening sentence is amazingly vivid, and throughout your piece you paint an amazing picture of the landscape you are writing about. Going forward, maybe a way to change up the flow of your piece if you wanted would be to add line breaks, especially at moments where you start sentences with "But". All in all, great work on this, and I hope to read more of your work soon!