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Ok, um, well this was certainly emotional. It's hard for me to critique such raw emotion because everyone feels it differently. I just loved how their was a clear color scheme throughout it, the red of blood, and the black of night. It painted a picture for the reader, dark as that picture may be.
The second half of the first stanza is a bit confusing. I think you could find another way to express your feelings without making the story of your poem hard to follow.