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Message to Readers
Any type of constructive criticism is greatly appreciated!
I really like the background we get of this girl's past life in the house. The description of her youth is probably the most intriguing part of the piece.
I would like to know a bit more of the background of this scene. Why exactly is she back at the house? Who are the people who currently live in the house? Is the narrator allowed to be back at the house, or has she snuck in?
I think this is a very good start! Answering some of the questions I have above and doing a few read throughs for edits would improve this piece a lot.