Harlow

United States of America

A human that does stuff with words among other humans who do other stuff with words

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Message to Readers

A friend on my soccer team broke her foot. Here’s what it was like waiting for help. Did I do well?

Waiting

May 27, 2019

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The world went silent
and tears rolled down
the dirty faces 
of sweaty teens. 

The air was thick
with our sorrow
and the wailing
of our crumbled teammate.

Her foot was at a disarray 
and we were waiting
for an eternity
until the ambulance came. 

Its sirens pierced the thick air
and our sorrow lifted
but still 
tears rolled down
the dirty faces 
of sweaty teens
and we were waiting
for an eternity 
until they stopp
 

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2 Comments
  • thelumosduck

    I like it! One suggestion is to try to use some more rhythm, but it’s great!


    6 months ago
  • mason wong

    A great poem!!!!!


    7 months ago