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Ta-da! My entry for weirdo's #sweetlybitter contest. i kinda like the idea but as far as execution goes, well, that's up to you to decide. i think i could've done better so i might edit it still.
I think the most moving part of this piece is how it slowly becomes evident that she's a bit of an alcoholic. I also enjoyed the semi-sad cliffhanger at the end.
I'd like to know more about why she wishes she was never born, of course....
I'm a fairly harsh reviewer, but I did like this piece a lot. I hope you do well in the contest and keep writing!