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An interesting thought process, and a creative mind! It is a cool poem based off of such a simple interaction.
I think there is sufficent detail in this poem for us to understand its meaning, which is good on the writer's part ^_^
I like your style of poetry, it is a simplistic yet flow of thought that forms lines to a flowing river of a story. Awesome work!