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This was great!! I loved it, every bit. From the character building, to the suspense, to the magical and fantastical aspects of it.
You probably don't remember me, but I reviewed your very first draft of this story. And I am delighted to see that you took my advice. Last time I was worried about the introduction of Miles and how he sort of just popped into the story. But you have fixed that perfectly. I can't find anything wrong with this piece except for the few spelling errors. And the one thing I would like to see is MORE!! I can't wait for chapter 2, I know it's going to be great.
Congratulations, you are the first person here that I have seen actually re-write their piece multiple times and include advice given to them so as to perfect it. Really, well done. Amazing, I loved it!