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Let me know if some grammar is incorrect. If you have an idea on how I could improve, please tell me! I'm always looking for improvement in my writing. I would appreciate anything.
The beginning paragraphs with the title. I was hooked with the first lines. With the first sentence, I knew that this will be filled with many emotions.
ARE YOU MAKING A SEQUEL?
I would recommend trying to shorten the small talk or the unnecessary details. The little dialogue in the middle of the paragraph can be perceived as minimal and trivial. Thanks for creating this piece!