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Please tell me if any of these characters interested you or made you want to know more. Also, do the sentences and phrasing flow?
She: "She asked the promising ones whether or not they would like to see her dragons..."
She owns dragons which speaks volumes about her personality. She is fierce and courageous.
He: "He enjoys old things..."
He enjoys old things, so he's intelligent and shy, but also smart and clever.
It: "...it would steal yarn from my mother's basket."
It's a cat, because it likes yarn.
She: Where does she get her dragons and where does she keep them? How many does she have?
He: Why isn't he afraid of death? What does he remember?
It: Does it have a family?
Your piece was very intriguing. Using so few details, you established brillant and interesting characters! Amazing job! Keep writing!