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The Hunger Games

By: HermioneGranger67


FREE WRITING

draw a name
out of a glass bowl
a raffle 
for death

points for beauty
charisma
strength

fight for your life
run
hide
gather

all enemies
kill to live

what happens next
no one knows

let the Hunger Games
begin.
 


Peer Review

I am a Hunger Games fan, and thought that this piece was a realistic description of the Hunger Games. The way it is written made it much more interesting and exciting to read than a normal summary. Certain death is suggested, and that adds to the intrigue of this piece.


You should add a line that says may the odds be ever in your favor. :) You could also go more in depth on the things that happen like the interviews, parade, and training, if you wanted to. Maybe include what happens if you win?


Reviewer Comments

Great job, hope this helps, and keep writing!