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I was happy at the fact that as soon as I read the first part, you published the second part. And I'm sensing something happening between the main character and Jacob. I don't know if that was intentional for the foreshadowing, but if it was, then that was amazingly done.
I'm trying to make predictions for the plot. And that's where you, the writer, have the advantage. You know what is going to happen and when. Perhaps you should ask your readers what they think is going to happen. Sometimes that will give the author more ideas as to what to put into the story. There is not much you can do for pulling readers into the story. You've done that amazingly well in the first part. That caused the second part to pull me in. That is something that does not often come easily to an author. But this comes to you naturally.