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Gray_1604

United States

14 years old
Part of the LGBTQ community
Badflower Lover
TØP Lover
Musician
Survivor
Fighter
Crazy (in a good way)

Message to Readers

Please give me some constructive criticism

Going Under

May 22, 2019

FREE WRITING

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The water level had reached my neck. It was brisk against my numb skin. My sister, Raneè, held my hand, her grip slowly loosening as the waves crashed over us time and time again. I tried to hold on to her but it was so hard. The tsunami was far from over and we knew deep down we wouldn’t survive this. Not this time. We’d survived the sun and the earthquakes but we were trapped now. The waves took my sister and she lost her grip on me. It took me under seconds later. I was gone. Darkness surrounded me.
I’m doing this for a contest called Mission Catastrophe. Here’s the link if you want to join.
https://www.youngwritersusa.com/contests/mission-catastrophe/
Give me some constructive criticism if you can, please.

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