bride124
United States
Writing is a big part of me and my daily life. I want to share it with the world so I joined this website. (P.S: I like followers and to do/receive peer reviews). A INCREDIBLE PIECE: https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/
114991/version/219125
Message to Readers
By the way, this 50th review will be the BIGGEST, LONGEST review I will ever make! So, I suggest you type away!
39 Comments
bride124
@BlottedInkWithABrokenQuill, although the deadline is past, I will make a exception, just for you!
Blotted Ink with a Broken Quill
Something... interesting has been happening. Kingdoms have risen, kingdoms have fallen, powers have shifted. The catalyst for most of these being "Him", or as he would call himself, Yours Truly (then he would wink and you could almost pass him off as human).
https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/117463/version/226018
(hope this is still valid for your secondary reviews.)
bride124
@upsidownpenguin, thank you! I will relish every single one!
Upsidownpenguin
That is a lot of reviews. Congrats!
weirdo
Thanks so much! I really appreciate it! You're an amazing member of this community who is always encouraging and delightful. Stay awesome!!!
Hannah Gaudette - JoyfulWriter
Thanks a lot!!! It's wonderful you have the dedication to do these reviews. Good luck!
AJ - Izzy
Aw, thank you so much! I'm super excited to get your feedback on the piece, I hope you enjoy reviewing it as much as I enjoyed writing it! :DD
BrokenSmile
Congrats @AJ Izzy. I’m sure their piece is great! Also, my piece needs a whole truckload of improvements, I’m very aware of that. Feedback would be helpful, so thanks. :)
Samina
Thank you so much. It our my pleasure that you are reviewing our work. You are a great inspirating writer. Your precious comments and review will surely help us to improve. Thank you for taking time for us.
All the best, hope you soon announce a contest for your 100th review.
Juliana
That’s so nice of you!!!!
Lovegood_24
Thanks!!
bride124
Oops I forgot about the receiving them by June 6th! I can't wait to read them all!
bride124
Hello guys! I have chosen the piece that will be my 50th review (ignore the reviews from the Peer Review-a-thon, they don't count as my 50th, you know?) Anyway, it is @AJ Izzy's "Suspect Not Found". But since I am the "Reviewing Queen" (LOL!), EVERY ENTRY COMMENTED BELOW THIS OFFICIAL COMMENT IS GETTING REVIEWED! (It won't be as thoroughly reviewed as my 50th but it will be just as helpful!) I hope you enjoyed my contest!
BrokenSmile
Almost Forever: https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/116277/version/221279
It’s 12:30, not 1:00, yay! Please keep in mind that I wrote this in a matter of hours late at night so it’s not my best work, sorry. There is a rushed part in the middle that I DEFINITELY plan on expanding. I’m going to improve this story, this is basically just a first draft. Sorry ‘bout the rushed stuff. ._.
BrokenSmile
Here’s a summary of what it’s going to be, I’ll post the link in here as soon as I put it on WTW. (At like one in the morning.)
Quinn Lawrence is a normal 17 year old girl with a bad past. Quinn’s mom died in childbirth. Her dad was so sad when he lost her mom that he approached life with anger and hate. He became an alcoholic and abused her. He later died in a drunk driving incident when Quinn was 13. She was passed around a few foster homes until she finally settled down in one. They give Quinn the necessities but let her do whatever she wants. She doesn’t run wild because she’s a good person, but becomes extremely depressed. She’s completely lost in life and contemplating suicide when she meets a boy who she becomes friends with. He’s 17, just like her. This boy pulls her out of her depression and she falls in love with him. When Quinn’s with him she feels happiness for the first time in years. She feels a new hope in her life and pushes aside her dark past, accepting it as something that made her who she is.
This is a lot different from anything I’ve ever tried to do, so don’t get triggered if it’s horrible.
bride124
@BrokenSmile, you are hilarious!
BrokenSmile
Saw this a few days ago and I'm trying to finish writing a romance story by tomorrow. ;-; Why sleep when you can write?
Wicked!
I'd love for you to review my piece of flash fiction titled ‘Wishing for a Miracle’
Actually, I *really* need a writer's review for it. It is a touching tale—with an unexpected ending!— of love, hope, and most of all, the twisted ways of Life.
Here's the link: https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/116044/version/220874
Johanna Marie
https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/114500/version/220066
Would be happy if you give it a try xx
bibliophile
Sorry, accidentally clicked post before I pasted the link to my piece. Here it is: https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/115292/version/219708
bibliophile
In a world where your looks determine your destiny, Clarice somehow managed to end up with the pathetic job of building sand castles. The worst part? She can't even build sand castles. They end up as awkward looking mounds of sand. She doesn't understand the point of her job. Building sand castles only to see them get washed away again. Clarice is determined to defy the Peryton, the ruler of the land. She tries to make his council see sense to no avail, and ends up setting off on a quest to defy her destiny, defeat the Peryton, and find out who she really is.
Here is the link to chapters 1 of my story (a novel) called Clarice's Quest.
Thank you for your consideration, and congrats on your soon to be 50 reviews! The WTW community greatly appreciates your feedback and support!
Samina
Are you tired from your pacing life? Do you want inner peace? I would like to suggest you to read this writing about amalgam of yoga and karate. Yoga is the dance of every cell with the music of every breath that creates inner serenity and harmony. Try out these asanas and get the missing tranquility in your lives.
https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/115256/version/219637
-Samina
Hannah Gaudette - JoyfulWriter
https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/114078/version/219959 This tells my story and shares information about living with severe food allergies. This is a subject very close to my heart and I want to reach as many people as I can, but I know I need to improve my writing in order to do that. Thank you very much for considering this piece!
CatCrazy0430
https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/113964/version/217247
My experience with being alone my whole life, too scared to talk to anyone, and then someone walks right into my life, and removes all my guards in a single moment. Helps me to open up. Everyone needs someone like that.
Juliana
https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/114991/version/219125
This is a piece about my experience with depression.
A Breath Into Silence
It would be nice to get some feedback on my piece titled "Karin" (https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/104851/version/199017). It's about a girl trying to cope with her own mortality and trying to stay strong. It's been missing .... something..... for a while and I cannot for the life of me tell what! If anybody could help, that would be amazing!!!
Living My Life Through Writing
I really need a review on my piece "All Because Of a Football Game." https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/free_writing/111344/versions/211884
The story is not very detailed and I need some help to figure out what it is lacking. The story includes LGBT+ themes and idea. It is a really good piece but I know that there is really somethings that need to be fixed. It tells the story of two boys in love with each other in their senior year of high school. One is on the football team and the other is an outsider. I need some help to make it better.
r|A|i|N
i would really love detailed feedback on "The Piano in His Ears":
https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/112598/version/214407
this one is complicated in that the plot is both finished and unfinished; it leaves a lot unexplained and there are probably some loose ends i should tie up in later revisions, but it's also somewhat complete in itself. it utilizes heavy description and tells the story of a boy struggling with depression after his father dies.
thank you for doing this! i appreciate the consideration.
bride124
@AJ-Izzy, your recommended piece sounds very promising. You are one of my leading contenders!
AJ - Izzy
Oh wow, that's so nice of you! Okay, I would love to have a review on a piece called "Suspect Not Found"
https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/100946/version/210832
It starts with a determined girl trying to find her friend at a police station, but all records, birth date, everything has disappeared. No one remembers her except the girl. The police and most people think she's lying or is delusional. The girl promises herself that she would find her friend, whatever it takes.
Yeah! I'm hoping to continue it somehow, so any feedback (even if it's not a review) would be amazing! Thanks again :)
Lovegood_24
I would love a review of my piece Anugwa: Prologue
It is about a planet and the people on it and when their world is in danger what the two main characters do (kind of a sic-fi dystopian story). The prologue is one of the main characters writing a letter to his friend as an adult after they were forced to move to Earth and then the reestablishment of their planet. Thanks for the consideration!
https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/113756/version/216704
-writinginhopesofsomeday-
I would be very grateful for a review on the piece, "and time moves on, chapter one" or "and time moves on, chapter two", located here:
https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/113078/version/215443
https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/114776/version/218834
This is the first part of the novel I'm writing, though I'm sure I'll find a better place to start 100 pages in:)
This is very "magic" related, though you won't be able to see it yet. A sentence that I hope to use eventually is:
"At one point, time became nothing and life became everything."
D.B.Quaginn
I would enjoy a review on my short story, "Heroes," at https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/95037/version/180607
It's about a clerk at a bank in a world of superheroes. And supervillians, of course.
I'd love a review.
weirdo
I would love a review on my piece, "The Land of Lost Things--Part 2". Here's the link
https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/113264/version/215876
It's a series that i've started about a girl who has lived in the Land of Lost Things, the place where all lost things go, her whole life. She's adjusted to her life until a new person appears, a little girl who is also lost.
I would love if you could give me any ideas! Thanks!
pencils.and.paper.roses
Ooh, love this idea! I’d love for “3...2...1...” to get a review. :) I don’t really have a solid summary for it (sorry! :/) but here’s the link:
https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/110454/version/210302
Juliana
Cool idea!
My piece is titled Equivalent (it’s my second newest piece; I’m sorry I don’t know how to get the links of stuff on my phone).
The prompt was to open the dictionary to a random word and write a story about it (hence, equivalent). I’m trying to make a point kinda about the hypocrisy of society with the story, but it’s not super black and white/good guy vs bad guy, though it might appear that way.
A person
"Something as sweet as a berry can turn as sour as death in the matter of seconds."
https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/114695/version/218677
bride124
Thanks for linking your story! Check out my contest #revoke!
Dmoral13
'angels just remind us mortals we never get a chance to fly #sweetlybitter'
https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/112780/version/214729
(giving you a summary would ruin it, sorry)
everyone loves it, but i want to improve. i want to know why people like it, but also how to make it better. to me its kinda rough