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Message to Readers
So yesterday I discovered a film program happening over the sumer. I REALLY want to get in, but I have to get accepted and get the scholarship for it first. These are the essays I had to write for it and they are ridiculously important to me. So if you could review this piece I would be forever grateful!! Thanks so much! :)
Very lovely the way you connected with the readers. The subject is inspiring, and the way you dished out the information to the readers was clever, witty and overall enjoyable.
If we are talking about films in general, you could do well to mention a few favourites, and some dissappointments when certain watching films. Perhaps give the reader some guidance; what makes a good film?
Hope to see more stuff like this from you in the future! Have a good day.