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This was a really amazing piece. I loved every bit of it! I've moved around a lot, and I make bread with my mom, so this really spoke to me.
You made making bread an analogy for trying to fit in and build a life, and you showed how making bread connected you as a family.
I am curious as to why you moved.
I loved the hook. Great job!
This was an enjoyable read from start to finish. Great work!
I would read this through out loud and change some of your sentences so that they are longer. It is just a tad choppy for all of the short/medium sentences.