I'm a HUGE fan of new experiences, as I'm sure most of us are...I ADORE anything that has to do with creating...My life seems to be the script of a crazy movie sometimes... I love writing of course!
I want SPECIFIC feedback, including WHERE I can make the suggested changes.
I don't shy away from criticism because I just want to improve my writing.
Be as honest and blunt as you like, just no unnecessary haters please. Thanks so much and smile on! :D
Written By: Ainsleigh
May 10, 2014
Dad. We hit the bottom of the money jar today. First time in two months. Personal record. Maybe we'll get a reward. Maybe we won't have to pay our rent next month.
Mom. Didn't have enough sugar for Josie's cookies today. We sent bread and jam from yesterday's breakfast instead. Josie still smiled on her way to school. It didn't matter to her. Today was her tenth birthday. And she was happy to have a school to go to.
Josie. I finished my book today. The one about the sailor. He goes on a long journey all around the world, searching for the treasure that will bring him the most happiness. He finds knowledge. He finds money. He finds fame. He stopped searching and went home, because that was the best treasure of all. Today, I went all the way to school and all the way back home. I dropped the bread on the way to school by accident. I found gratitude.
Jacob. I broke my toy airplane today. It was a mistake, but mommy yelled at me. Daddy says he made a lot of mistakes before, so I wonder why can't I? Mommy says that the air plane was expensive. Daddy says he'll find a way to pay for a new one. Sister says she needs a new dress for her school assembly. I say I can make an airplane out of paper, even though it won't last very long.