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This is darker then the things i usually write but i was trying to experiment with pace and on conveying emotions through a faster vs slower one. If you have any feedback i would love to hear it!
I'm one for things that are dark, but this is something else. I don't know what this was portraying, but it was powerful. I kind of portrayed it as someone who takes and takes from their loved one, or someone else, and never gives back. That's all they do is take. And it's never enough.
I want to know what moved you to write this piece of literature.
This was truly amazing. I don't know what drew me to your piece, but I just had to read it. It just grabbed my attention. It's not often (for me at least) to meet or at least read and be able to review another very passionate and powerful writer, like yourself. Well done.