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I really liked the cast of characters and hkw they were all introduced. It makes me think that I am about to read a very intricte and compelling drama.
I think some of the characters could be described a bit better. For example instead of just saying who they are and what they do add a little bit of personality. Tell the reader about something that the character does, something that doesn't relate to that persons status or job, but their personality. For example, she regularly puffed out her cheeks and clenched her hands into fists, as if she had something to say. But she never said it. Basically kind of what you did with the head chef.
I hope this isn't the end. I really hope you continue this little saga because I know you can make it an amazing and gripping story. Well done and goodluck! :)