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The fact that gender identity acceptance is a controversial topic makes me want to read on.
Society mistakenly assesses transgenders, and tries to be empathetic towards them to compensate for it.
She appears to be very passionate about the topic of transgenders, and brings a lot of emotion to back up her assertions.
Nothing is missing.
Yes, the body of the op-ed fits smoothly.
This is a VERY well-written essay, but I would reevaluate the way you connect your initial idea of phony empathy to the idea of transgenders.
Focus on the comment I made in the intro