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Message to Readers
I know that this competition is over, but I wrote to the prompt anyway. I wanted to share the other side of the dairy industry, and make people think twice over their choices and the way that they affect other lives. Thanks for reading and please consider sourcing dairy responsible.
A strong opinionated paragraph
Dairy cows are mistreated
I liked the comments that were designed to help you relate to the piece
Add facts and edit vague statements
I don’t agree with your opinion, but as someone on the other side, with a different view, I hope that my comments help you with your piece