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The hook is great! I like the organization and use of a real life example.
Although cyberbullying makes it easier to bully people, it is still wrong and hateful.
I think you really started to add emotion near the end of this essay which was very convincing.
Don't be frightened by all of the comments I made! Most of them are simple fixes, and it doesn't mean that the essay is terrible. I really enjoyed your essay and thought it was very strong; these suggestions will just make your work stronger, and hopefully you will remember some of this advice for any other essay you write.
Yes, I also really enjoyed your last sentence.
Don't be scared to add your opinion earlier on to the paper!