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I love the repetition of the first stanza again at the end! I've always found it a wonderful way to draw attention to patters or get a reader to reflect and it really brings your poem to an interesting stop.
I feel like the narrator's idealism about another world that could exist could be pushed further from realism and closer to wonder, which is where a lot of the Ideal and Existentialism often is in the mind.
I think the whole thing is wonderful. The way that it's specific and vague at the same time allows a reader to really understand the narrator as they see what they think is the wondrous. The shortness of the lines makes it seem so simple while still being able to smoothly convey a complex idea.