Peer Review by Gray_1604 (United States)

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Existential - Please Review

By: SparklingEmbers


FREE WRITING

Is it crazy to believe
Another realm, we could achieve.
Another sunrise, another day,
Another planet, another way.

Is it crazy to believe
We could run from fear.
We could start a dynasty,
A new society.

Is it crazy to believe
There are many more
There is no outbreak of war.
There is a free world-
A door.

A door that holds color
Shapes and sizes
Many prizes.
A sun that streams golden
Never hidden by clouds of doubt
A world full of embolden-
Ment.

Seas, lakes and rivers
A world consisting of givers
Grass so green
You never have seen.

Flowers of bright
Pink yellow purple
Blue red, orange
Petals never melting
Never losing light.
Never fading black or white.

Creatures so majestic
Fragile and domestic
All shapes and hues
Eyes can’t refuse

Listing every aspect
Would take far to much time
Just picture with your imagination
A world with no crime

Is it crazy to believe
Another realm we could achieve
Another sunrise, another day
Another planet, another way.

This is for a school project please review!!!!!!! :) 

Message to Readers

Please Review!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


Peer Review

This piece is very out there, in a good way. It tells the readers that we could achieve new things


What was the oringal meaning for this poem to be written? Why did you decide to write it?


Reviewer Comments

This is a very good piece and I like it very much. It’s very descriptive and I belive you could really make it somewhere with your writing!