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These number function as a countdown to a final closure, of both the work and of life. With the symbols associated with the numbers, the author explores universal themes with life and death.
I would think the first paragraph would need more detail, simply because of the strange heart/clock metaphor. I think it's a very interesting metaphor that can be explored more.
The countdown aspect of this piece and the quasi-blank title gives the reader a sense of emptiness, and unlike other pieces that have attempted to imitate this feeling, this piece gets it head on.