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Could I have feedback overall? Maybe especially on the points I made?
You used a lot of pathos and some logos, which especially kept the reader attached to the work, nice job!
To sum up the writer's stance: Religion does not give an excuse for discrimination.
The emotional form of persuasion was definitely the most convincing and effective.
It's not a necessary change- but I noticed that the shortness of the conclusion paragraph surprised me. An extra two sentences could give it the extra push it needs.
Yes! The structure is absolutely fantastic! Bravo!
Keep writing, and just refrain from making it a little shorter! Your writing is great!