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Message to Readers
Escapril Day 12 - spring cleaning
The way that this piece begins delights me: "gold leaks into her wind and pour like silk across her aching eyelids." I've never thought of the sunlight as leaking before and pouring over my eyes like soft silk.
I would like to know the significance of "that morning." You've led me through her waking moments, but you haven't fully revealed what makes the day so unique. Your last sentence states as follows: "thanking this new world for all it has given her and all it has taken away." This sentence leads me to believe that this person you talk about may have gone under some sort of grief. If that be the case, then the significance of "that morning" would be that she feels liberated from her griefs or burdens. If my presumptions are incorrect, then please add more hints about why "that morning" is worth writing about.
You have a way with words. I enjoyed being able to glimpse the colorful day that the woman in your piece experienced. Thank you!