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Message to Readers
lowercase, random equals signs, and line spacing are all intentional.
if you have any recommendations or if anything is unclear, please let me know. i’m eager to expand my writing skills and i love receiving reviews and comments.
I love the way you broke up the lines, the (slightly) unconventional use of lowercase/uppercase, and the equals signs! Your phrasing is spot on. I really love this piece.
I would love to know more about the relationship between the narrator/speaker and the "belligerent humans", since they seem to be separate entities. I get the sense that they don't quite see eye-to-eye..... And what does our speaker think about the meaning of life? [I feel like the poem is great the way it is; these are just inner musings after reading this piece]
Wonderful poem! Please, please, please continue to write! Your figurative language is breathtaking, and the mastery you have over your line-breaks is fantastic. If anything, I'd like a little gentler transition from the line "blue blue sky" and "all for me".