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This piece left me gaping at my screen, wondering why I haven't read it yet. The metaphors and word choice are absolutely amazing, as well as the writing itself. This is, no doubt, one of the best pieces I've read on this site. I'm so glad that I found it :)
I don't think so. This piece is already so amazing and beautiful that I don't think it could get much better. Maybe some details about the character would be nice, but they're not necessary at all.
"...seeking in vain for the end." This part is amazingly and accurately portrayed, and how it's repeated in the piece gives it a nice sense of familiarity.
Maybe extending it a little would be nice, but that's entirely up to you. Also, in the beginning of the piece, the words are each given a line, while in the middle it doesn't happen again. I would try keeping that consistent to allow for better flow.
I relate to this poem so well. I said it above, but this is definitely one of the best pieces I've read here. Please keep writing :)