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So again, I don't write poetry. All I know is that this is iambic pentameter, and that I wrote it really quickly cause I just noticed our grass is really green.....that is all.
The constant referencing of the small things that really seem to be overlooked. I was frankly moved by the description of the waves as a “shade of dolphin tears. ”
When referencing the shifting sky, you compared it to horse’s appetite in the way it changes. I’ve only heard of horses being perpetually hungry, so I was wondering what you meant by this?
I honestly love this piece as I too have an appreciation for the greener grasses in life. I hope to read more of your grass-based works soon. This was really cool!