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Message to Readers
Hi everyone! This is my first "Where I am From" poem, and I would love to hear your feedback!
This poem gives me the impression of looking at the past through different windows, seeing the different things that make you who you are.
Beautiful use of language. You have greatly interwoven sensory details and imagery to paint amazing pictures in my minds eyes.
My favourite line is: "From the blossoms of Spring flowers they’ve planted, And the promise of endless adventure yet to be discovered. " This line about endless adventure and exploring the world is very inspiring for me, and I feel you put a lot of effort into the wording.
Continue improving your writing and language use. Review the phrasing and adjust flow of your sentences to make them less choppy.
Amazing use of imagery and metaphor! But I think the sentence structure sounds a bit cut short in the middle sections.